標(biāo)題: 英格力士，俺也來(lái)一段 [打印本頁(yè)] 作者: changkongceyi 時(shí)間: 2013-1-11 17:35 標(biāo)題: 英格力士，俺也來(lái)一段 諸位大俠： 9 ?' N4 N, E, _+ A- n: u' Q 小弟經(jīng)常吹噓自己在學(xué)新概念，怕自己把這事兒說(shuō)著說(shuō)著就忘了，現(xiàn)在還在基礎(chǔ)階段，獻(xiàn)丑來(lái)一段，諸大俠莫笑. f- S w; x9 F) O& Q, }
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As a yong guy who still is interested in playing,how to spend my holiday is a really serious problem for me.As I have little money,the choices for me are very few,I can not afford anything coast much.At the end of last December,I met the problem again,but I am not a guy who does not dare to have a crazy idea.) ^+ p$ c- J! o4 ~
After asking a friend comes from Baoji,I got my destation for my holiday,it is Baoji where I would to go .I have several friends there and it is also a city rich in history and the coast would also be little.I am sure it is an ideal place for my vacation.But the most important thing is that I want go there by biycle alone in such a cold winter. t& y$ ]$ K7 N1 J1 \- K/ i2 e* p$ ~
With warm clothes,gloves,torch,enough food, drink,and even spare battery,I got my start at the morning of 31th,December,I was sure it would be a wonderful gift for my new year.At my startline,the time is 7:50pm.I did not check any map before my start because I think it is more interseting if I go the way by my own ability.So I went to south along 210 road,the road which took me to one of the higest mountain of Qinling,there were few people on the way that morning, I rade fast for I had past there several times.but there were several trees new planted fell down on the way,the trees were so large that I had to stop to get a new way,they always do thus stupid things for us as we all know. + t' [8 H+ b. f% L# D After 210 road,I went to west along 107 road,it is a way located at the north of Qingling mountains,I had a good look at of the mountains on my way to west ,there are many scenry spots along the mountin I had visted several in 2012,I can remember all I had done there.When I was riding there was a message came,I read it at my rest point,it read”happy new year”,came from my phone manager who gave me the opportunities to meet Liangwendao and Qulimin this year and I learnt a lot from them,so I sent a message back to her about what I was doing and how beautiful it is to see the smog along this way with the best wishes to her for the new year.After this I went on riding again,the distence from my point to Baoji was still far enough. To my surprise is that there are several long slope,I had to slow down.to save my energy.Several hours later,I arrived a cross,there was a driver who having a rest,I asked him the distence to Baoji from my point,he told me that there is a half,hearing that I was shocked,may I get my destination on time?But all what I can do that moment is keep riding,I can not give up my plan.# [/ ]# D9 A I( y0 p( `0 b
To avoid worrying much about the trip,I started to linsten music by a nano borrowed from my friend,it is really important to take it easy at such a nervous moment.When I arrived at the way to Taibai,the highest mountain of Qinling,I asked an old man how to get my destination again,he told me there is a distence of 70km left for me and there are few resterants or hotels along the way, it would be a hard way.After eating the food in my bag I turned on my torch,it is dangerous to ride without it in dark.As a happy fool,I can stay calm when I am alone,I can play game with myself just like sid,so I had a good time in my riding,I had a carefully look at of the stars on sky,we can hardly see these beautiful stars in city,you can have a great share of it.' ]7 u6 l) N& \" M! q8 c4 A( y( y5 `
After 14 hours riding,I got my destation at 10 in night,my friends were waiting me worrily there,one of them laughed”you are a really happy fool”,but all what I wanted that time were food and rest,I was so starve and tired to say any more.( U) `" _1 `' m$ o
此次旅行從2012.12.31開(kāi)始，結(jié)束于2013.1.3，共計(jì)行程400公里左右，單人單車(chē)，收獲如下： 7 k# v6 l' @/ P: o8 J 1. 伯努利方程貌似對(duì)卡車(chē)也有效——俺在寶中線(xiàn)返程時(shí)身旁有重型卡車(chē)有高速通過(guò)，俺感到了股強(qiáng)烈的氣流，吹得俺都有擺動(dòng)，然后俺真的明白火車(chē)站那道線(xiàn)的意義… ; Z V8 U9 g% X$ o9 P5 B 2. 沖鋒衣PU涂層真的透氣——俺返程后發(fā)現(xiàn)背包帶是濕的，而外套卻是干的，材料真 的很有趣 ; `# e0 U$ `0 A# k7 l, x0 y* t& q. G( _ 3. 靠估計(jì)不可能一直玩下去——俺朋友的商店吊頂用輕型龍骨，已經(jīng)有明顯塌陷，他們干活沒(méi)有計(jì)算" C2 T8 v. G" D; W* Y4 r
4. 沒(méi)文化很可怕——炎帝祠有堵名人題字的墻，但仔細(xì)看看發(fā)現(xiàn)挺有趣：發(fā)展、弘揚(yáng)、促進(jìn)、提高，還有一位要盡早完成祖國(guó)統(tǒng)一的…俺第一感覺(jué)是運(yùn)動(dòng)會(huì)入場(chǎng)口號(hào): b+ ?$ k7 r5 `5 m4 ?9 [
5. 沒(méi)追求更可怕——朋友的朋友，2012總共工作兩個(gè)月（打工，兩個(gè)月便放棄），不讀書(shū)、不做事，成天無(wú)所事事，住處垃圾堆得跟山似的，聽(tīng)到俺讀書(shū)的第一句話(huà)是“那有啥讀的” / v, A Y4 C0 |$ O q作者: 超越自己 時(shí)間: 2013-1-11 17:53
寫(xiě)得不錯(cuò)，這會(huì)有點(diǎn)兒眼疼，看的花了，等會(huì)我再好好看看，不知道之前基礎(chǔ)怎么樣，寫(xiě)得還是不錯(cuò)的。繼續(xù)加油，等哪幾我也上來(lái)秀一下，哈哈。作者: robaiming 時(shí)間: 2013-1-11 18:08
兄弟學(xué)了多久了，在你面前很慚愧啊作者: 海鵬.G 時(shí)間: 2013-1-11 20:53
提示: 作者被禁止或刪除 內(nèi)容自動(dòng)屏蔽作者: 潑墨 時(shí)間: 2013-1-11 22:06
第一句語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤就很多 建議把語(yǔ)法鞏固一下作者: 天水藍(lán) 時(shí)間: 2013-1-11 23:23
樓主還是很有潛力的哦. ' Q* Y( L( V7 R$ ^+ f恕我直言，兄弟寫(xiě)的這段，基本是中文思維和中文語(yǔ)感。建議樓主盡量多讀多背好的文章，定有大的突破作者: 工具人 時(shí)間: 2013-1-12 01:47
無(wú)論如何，寫(xiě)了這么多都要鼓勵(lì)一下，俺除了考GRE作文之前突進(jìn)那陣子，都沒(méi)怎么寫(xiě)過(guò)這么長(zhǎng)的。不知道為什么不能給你加分。。。 c9 n- l! I: ~# Q7 r0 s* x
好多語(yǔ)法和拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤可以被word校正。 * A' T& F F1 a8 L g這篇如果給外國(guó)人看的話(huà)，可能看得不是很順暢，但大意能懂。話(huà)說(shuō)回來(lái)，中國(guó)人寫(xiě)的東西，有幾個(gè)能讓外國(guó)人看得通暢呢 8 r; t h0 v6 ^. u
他們自己寫(xiě)的東西也都語(yǔ)病連連，簡(jiǎn)單一例, I don't know nothing about this，怎么翻譯？習(xí)慣用法而已。語(yǔ)言本來(lái)就是說(shuō)的人多了，錯(cuò)的也成了對(duì)的。/ F8 a& n# q& S( k( u9 |6 @
能交流是目的，樓主加油！1 s3 D% L$ t9 s
% W( g5 l% @% t- N0 r; U& \# _ 作者: 04102 時(shí)間: 2013-1-12 18:44
佩服一下。。俺在寶雞的說(shuō) 3 r5 S$ A6 F1 A3 P* ]( O加油吧作者: gerry0086 時(shí)間: 2013-1-13 15:39
想學(xué)英語(yǔ) 但音標(biāo)都忘記了 作者: 秋山雨亭 時(shí)間: 2013-1-14 08:24
當(dāng)初學(xué)的時(shí)候也沒(méi)在意作者: 天水藍(lán) 時(shí)間: 2013-1-14 11:55
我學(xué)英語(yǔ)是好多年之前的事了。我的感覺(jué)，大量閱讀還是挺有效的。6 A& i9 C* y% [4 ^! X8 w
有一套 叫 循序漸進(jìn)美國(guó)英語(yǔ)， 我覺(jué)得那套書(shū) 不錯(cuò)，可以根據(jù)自己實(shí)際情況選擇難度。文章很輕松，對(duì)提高語(yǔ)感有好處。作者: 刀剪錘 時(shí)間: 2013-1-15 14:12
崩潰的英格力士作者: 宋木林 時(shí)間: 2013-1-31 21:30
不敢恭維啊，大哥作者: 路很長(zhǎng)一起走 時(shí)間: 2013-2-1 20:36
佩服啊 我正在學(xué)啊作者: mosion@126.com 時(shí)間: 2013-5-15 14:40
基礎(chǔ)不夠好作者: 猛龍C 時(shí)間: 2014-6-7 23:24
很不錯(cuò)！作者: andyany 時(shí)間: 2014-6-8 07:38
Lz had a great spirit which between lines.作者: zuoer988 時(shí)間: 2014-6-9 21:54
1 i can not afford anything cost much 改為 i can not afford to buy anything cost much。cuz afford means having the fanancial to do something or to buy something.+ M9 ]+ J. D2 ^
2.by the end of the last December. by the end 是固定搭配 。 ; n- D6 ]/ T t) C7 U% H; L; Q9 f2 ~
3.i got the problem again.用 get 或者 have 都行。 " K$ m* F8 z6 V4.by the end of the last December , i got the problem again ,but i am not such someone being afraid of figuring out a crazy idea.沒(méi)太看懂這句您想表達(dá)什么。 A K; { q: y* T第一段大概就這些小細(xì)節(jié) ，您寫(xiě)得很不錯(cuò) 對(duì)于初學(xué)者來(lái)說(shuō)，孰能生巧加油，另外 在英翻界有句話(huà) 就是十句漢譯英才能出來(lái)一句英譯漢 也就是多精讀 多翻譯 才能糾正中式思維。一點(diǎn)小建議，共勉。作者: Burberry 時(shí)間: 2014-6-11 13:57
錯(cuò)字好多，表示支持。作者: Burberry 時(shí)間: 2014-6-11 14:03
After viewed ur article i found that you're really a happy guy who is lucky to travel there in baoji. Just be noted that there are plenty of typos in ur article. Anyway it's a good one which leave us an amazing impression of Baoji.
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